The advice and insight given here is sound. Things such as form (grammar, etc.) can be (and NEED to be) corrected, but there is NO substitute for the original imagery and enthusiasm for the subject so brilliantly displayed here. And...what can we say...here is a kid coming to this board actually DOING his homework! This represents the most important human factor for which also no substitute exists or can be fabricated!

thanks Dandelion, i myself hate to cheat, whats the point of cheating, i think i big problem with our schools is that kids are more worried about their grade than what they learn. To me this is the biggest problem in public education. On the other hand i really need to improve my grammer.

Dandelion, Mr.Black and others, i have a question for you all. What do you think is an appropiate name for someone in my story, the person who is telling the story about Bradbury. I chose Anna Black. I picked Anna because that is my sisters name, and I deeply care about her, and wish to represent her in my works, and Black because, Bradbury names one of the Mars Captains Black, i think its the 2nd launch. That way i incorporate both. Oh and yes its a female because i got bored writing about men as my main characters.
oh and grammar is your friend